Author?

more! more!!!! thats really great!!

You like it that much! Question- if you saw that book in the book store and read the back, that was the preview( the one i wrote before) would you buy it?

i tell you wat, when i have finished ill send it to all of you. ok:study:

oh boy! id buy it, make sure its long though, they seem long when you write it then look tiny when your done, are you planning on being an author???

i rite alot of poetry and when one of my close friends died in an ATV accident i wrote this poem..., maybe you guys could help me improve it some.

Life it seems, will fade away
Drifting further every day
Getting lost within myself
Nothing matters no one else
I have lost the will to live
Simply nothing more to give
There is nothing more for me
Need the end to set me free

Things are not what they used to be
Missing one inside of me
Deathly lost, this can't be real
Cannot stand this hell I feel
Emptiness is filing me
To the point of agony
Growing darkness taking dawn
I was me, but now she's gone
No one but me can save myself, but it to late
Now I can't think, think why I should even try
Yesterday seems as though it never existed
And now i say....goodbye...

is it good?

peace out girl scoute

I think it is good, but it sounds a bit emo.But maybe that is the point, well anyway.

Keep living!

Hey guys, heres another sneak peak.Oh and are any of you good drawers, if you are send me some drawings of elves please.






Knock, knock, “ Dho dis dit” Markus yelled with his mouth full. “It is I Sathon, prince of Lithanon, and I have found the woman I love!” He barged through the door with the most mirthful look on his hansom face. “I’m in love brother! Love! I have never felt like this before, I feel like I have been reborn!” “So, who’s the lucky lady?” Markus said bluntly, still eyeing his food. “Her name is Alexa. Isn’t it the most beautiful name you have ever heard?” “For sure,” Markus replied sarcastically. “Tomorrow I must see her. I will shower her with gifts, and ask her to come back with me here. What am I doing, I have to go pack, and choose the gifts!” and without warning prince Sathon ran out of the room with a bounce in his step. “He interrupted my dinner for that, how selfish.” Markus thought as gorged on his roast beef.

I would totally bye that book dude.

D elightful
E ntertaining
A t last
T rivial
H oray

wow, now i feel bad cause there are all these good authors and poets and stuff. sometimes i write beginnings of stories but i lose interest in them or just don't have the patience to finish them or anything. or i can't think of anything more. usually they are really bad.

I'm glad you guys like it, do you have any ideas i can use, or maybe some constructive critisism( did i spell that right?)

Oh and if your a good drawer pleeeease send me a drawing of an elf, I will give you full credit for it( if it is good enough and we use it.)

sry, i can't draw anything really, let alone elves

Its going great, heres another preview( if anyone steals my story im going to kill you!)*Ah hem* back to the book.



“Someone’s at the door for you.” Quickly rushing past her friend while tidying up her hair, Alexandria flung the door open. But to her disappointment it wasn’t Sathon, but instead a rather young man by elf standards. “Good morning madam, are you Alexandria?” “Err, yes I am, how can I help you?” “I have some packages and a message from prince Sathon.” Alexandria was filled with glee. The youngling passed her the packages and then recited the message,

“Alexandria my love, I am missing you every moment of the day, I cannot wait until you move in to the palace. I am having a masquerade ball in three days time and I hope you use my gifts to their full potential, Love Sathon.”
When the man finished he began to blush, “What is the matter?” Alexandria asked curiously, “Well umm, the prince wanted me to give you… one more thing.” “Ok, so what is it th- whoa!” before she could finish the boy quickly kissed her on the cheek then ran away.
Is it good?

Society’s Unwanted Children
By Phoenix (sorry i put my real name on there)
Part I
Beginning Scene: Joe’s Bar Jack and friend Tyler enter, right as Alezandro Mone is getting ready to sing.
Jack: I just don’t think there’s another girl out there for me man. At least not one that could handle all my anger. (Chuckles to himself)
Peter: You have to be the oddest person I have ever net. I mean you could just go out and get a girl and have fun with her.
Jack: No I couldn’t do that because I just don’t find a woman who sells herself all that appealing.
Peter: Well that girl up there has some anger! (Shouting because the music is so loud)
Jack: (staring to pay attention to a girl singing about how she’ll do what she wants to no matter what anyone says and that if someone gets in her way she’ll take them down one at a time) Who is that?
Joe/bartender: That there’s Alezandro Mone but everyone calls her Ale. That is the most gorgeous girl in town, also has more anger than the devil himself.
Jack: I want her. (Says this with the determined voice) and I plan on having her.
Peter: What are you talking about? Didn’t you just say you’d probably never want a woman again?
Jack: That was before I saw her. And I plan on having her,
Joe/bartender: (while refilling their drinks) I wouldn’t count on that man. What’s a Phoenix?
Jack: it’s the most powerful, most elegant, and beautiful bird in the word. It has a heart of fire and it when it dies its reborn through its ashes. And why not? Does she not date or something?
Joe: Yea she dates as long as her foster brother approves but lately she’s not been listening to her brother as much. There’s been some problems there I don’t know.
Jack: Who’s her brother? I might know him.
Joe: Bobby Mone. Esther Mone adopted them.
Jack: Don’t know him do you Tyler?
Peter: Yea he’s a real tough guy streetwise and all. Let’s just say he’s not the kind of guy you want to mess with.
Jack: Oh well. Yu can’t stop a guy on a mission.
Peter: Hey man she might not even for you. Did you think about that? (Laughing)
Jack: Do I look like the kind of a guy that would get turned down?
Peter: No you look like the kind of guy who’s really over-confident. Hey man here she comes.
Jack: I’ll catch you later. (Walks over to Ale) Hi, I’m Jack
Ale: (Glances at him without a second thought) And?
Jack: What’s your name?
Ale: Ale. Is that all I can help you with Jack? (Says this bluntly)
Jack: Maybe. Can I get you a drink?
Ale: No you may not. I’m 17. Bet you don’t want to talk to me now, now then do ya?
Jack: No that’s cool. How about a soda?
Ale: Ok.
Jack: So you’re a singer huh?
Ale: (pouring a flask in her drink then takes a pill) not really it’s just a spare time kind of thing
Jack: (laughs while looking at her cup) That’s cool. I have a spare time kind of thing to.
Ale: Oh yea what?
Jack: I fight
Ale: Like professionally?
Jack: You could say that I used to just start fights on the street but now I own a place where people can just fight for the fun of it, it’s kind of like that movie fight club you know. In fact that’s probably where I got the idea from.
Ale: And is anyone allowed at this so called club?
Jack: Well you could come check it out with me if you want to.
Ale: I don’t know maybe I shouldn’t.
Jack: Ok well I guess I gotta go (and gets up to walk away)
Ale: Wait… you’ll let me in free?
Jack: You sure your brother won’t mind?
Ale: Do I honestly look like the kind of girl who listens to everything her brother says? I’m in. If it’s for free.
Jack: In that case let’s go.
Ale: Great
Scene change: The car pulls up to the club and Jack and Ale get out.
Jack: Welcome to my sanctuary!
Ale: It looks great. Let’s go.
Jack: There’s something you should know if you go in there you have to fight.
Ale: Ok (says surprisingly)
Jack: Alright (laughing)
Ale: (enters the club) This place is great Jack.
Jack: Thanks I like it alright. (Sees Peter across the room) I want you to meet a friend of mine. Hey Peter come over here will ya
Peter: Hey He-y (exaggerated) you’re that singer you were really good. I’m Peter.
Ale: It’s nice to meet you I’m Ale. Jack says you’re the co-founder of this place.
Peter: Yea that would be me
Peter: So hey are you going to fight?
Ale: I hear you don’t have a choice.
Peter: Well it is a rule. Alright its time to go
Jack: Aww you’ll do great. (Stands in center of the room and starts the meeting) Welcome everyone to the main spot tonight. As you all know if it’s you’re first night here you have to fight, so who’s first.
Ale: I’ll go.
Jack: (smiling) Alright any takers? No? Alright then how about me?
Ale: Ok. Let’s go (this said confidently)
Jack: (while taking off his shirt and shoes and Ale did the same she kept on her bra) You scared?
Ale: Do I look scared?
(The fight began. He hit She hit. They both shed blood. The fight lasted 2 hours. And then at the end…
Ale: I hate to embarrass you but I have to do this. (And she hit him and he fell Ale won the fight.
Everyone: (screaming) OH MY GOD (over and over)She Beat Jack!!!!! Oh my God!!!
Ale: No hard feelings come here
Jack: Come Here. (Leads her over to the corner and starts kissing her)
Ale: I’ll take that as a no. (And kisses back)
Scene change: Bobby at the Joe’s Bar
Bobby: Hey Joe where’s Ale?
Joe: She left with some guy a few hours ago she gave me the address.
Bobby: You let her go off with some guy give me that address. Who was it?
Joe: Jack Williams he owns that place where you can go fight for the fun of it. That’s where he took her actually.
Bobby: I’m going to kill 3 people tonight. You, him, and her. Man I have a busy night so excuse me.
Setting Change: Back at the spot/club Bobby has just entered the building and is greeted by Peter.
Peter: hi I’m Peter welcome you’re new right so you have to fight so let’s find you a partner.
Bobby: No I’m just hear to fi (sees Ale and Jack making out) fight Jack Williams.
Robbie: Alright. Yo Jack you just got a challenger.
Jack: Ok I’ll be right there. You going to watch me.
Ale: Of cou- Oh my God!
Jack: What?
Ale: It’s my brother Bobby. The one who just challenged you. He’ll try and kill you. I mean who do you think taught me to fight.
Jack: I’ll watch myself don’t worry. I never lose two fights in a row.
Ale: just be careful ok?
Jack: Ok
Ale: (walking over to bobby) Bobby what are you doing don’t do this.
Bobby: Excuse me as soon as I kill him I’m taking you home and then we’ll talk.
Ale: Bobby! (The fight began. They shook hands and started the fight.)
Bobby: I better not ever see you touch my sister again man. You got that? (Says while walking around Jack)

Jack: I’m sorry no I don’t remind me again. (Tauntingly)
Bobby: (slams in the head) I said you better not touch my sister again. You got it now.
Jack: Sorry no I forgot again. (Bobby slams his head in again. Blood flying everywhere)
Jack: Alright I got it. Shit I lost it again. (Bobby slams him in again with Jack’s blood flying again then Jack starts laughing and jumps on Bobby and shakes out all the blood on him. Then attacks him till Bobby goes limp. Jack gets up)
Jack: Get him to a hospital (gets Ale and takes her to his room)
Ale: I really should go check on Bobby.Jack: Shh. (he soothes) He'll be fine. I saw you out there watching and i realize that we share a dark secret Ale.Ale: What are you talking about?Jack: You crave violence and blood. You don’t have to deny it.Ale: I don’t know what you're talking about.Jack: You're telling me that you don’t get off every time someone hits you or you see someone get hit. And that you don’t love the smell of blood. (He leans towards her with blood dripping everywhere)Ale: (swallows) No uhh I don’t.Jack: (leans in closer and whispers seductively) Are you sure?Ale: No. (She gasps as Jack grabs her and kisses her with his bloodstained mouth and picks her up and slams her into the wall, she kisses back and they were quiet for the longest time and then they fell asleep in each other’s arms.
Scene change: Jack visits bobby at the hospital
Bobby: (looks up and sees Jack) Get the hell out of my room.
Jack: Aww now don’t be like that. I just came by to say I’m sorry for being so hard on you your first night. But it was somewhat your fault I mean I just accepted the challenge.
Bobby: You honestly think I care about the fight. It’s about you messing around with my little sister. What the hell have you done to her?
Jack: I haven’t done anything to her. She chooses everything she does. In fact you might be interested to know your sister is well umm…
Bobby: (furiously) Shut Up!!! You don’t know anything about my sister. For Chris sake. I swear if I find out that you touched her or hurt her I will report you to the police. I mean I would kill you but I want you to suffer for a long time. What do you want with her anyway?
Jack I think you should know me and her we share something that most people would find appalling, and you probably will think I’m crazy.

its not hard just write about something you know and its even easier if you read a lot and heres some more

Bobby: It’s a little late for that. And what could you to possibly have in common?
Jack: Well I was never absolutely positive until I saw her looking at us last night. She wasn’t looking with worry, but a desire for the blood.
Bobby: What the hell are you talking about?
Jack: She thirsts for blood. She loves the smell, the taste; she craves it just like me. Violence gets her off ma…
Bobby: SHUT UP!!! You’re crazy. I can’t believe you pulled my sister in your twisted little world. My sister is not like that at all. Stay away from her or I swear I’ll call the police and have you put away for a long time.
Jack: (approaching Bobby’s bed) Oh I wouldn’t do that if I were you. Because you see there only about five police there that aren’t working for me, and plus I wouldn’t want to kill you (starts twisting Bobby’s arm Bobby screams) because believe it or not Ale does care about you. So don’t make me upset her. (Twists harder) OK?
Bobby: (grimacing) no I won’t just let you screw with my sister.
Jack: I’m sorry what was that I couldn’t hear you. (Twists till you can feel his arm crack)
Bobby: Alright I won’t involve the police but I will make sure you stay away from my sister. And if that means having to kill you then so be it. (Sighing as jack loosens his grip)
Nurse: (nurse walks in speaking sternly) What in the world is going on in here?
Jack: Nothing mam I was just making sure my good friend here was ok. (Looking back at Bobby) See you around Bobby. I’ll tell Ale you said hey. (Turns around to leave)
Scene Change: Hospital room, Bobby’s asleep as Ale walks in the room.
Ale: Bobby you awake?
Bobby: What happened to you last night?
Ale: Yea. I’m sorry I left I wanted to go with you but Jack said you would be fine and he was hurt to so I just to help Jack. I mean he was drenched in blood. (Blood said lustfully)
Bobby: Yea He came by.
Ale: Yea I knew he would like you. And didn’t I tell you he was a good guy. I mean there was no hard feelings right. It was just a wholesome fight, and you challenged him.
Bobby: He threatened to kill me Ale if I said anything to the police.
Ale: What are you talking about? Jack wouldn’t say that. I think you’ve been taking to much of those pain killers that got you on here.
Bobby: No Ale listen it’s not the medicine. I don’t want you around him anymore. He’s dangerous. And he’s changing you to.
Ale: He is not. I’m not hearing this Bobby. I like him ok. I like him a lot and I would appreciate it if you would just let me be happy for just this once. I don’t need you to protect me anymore. Ok just leave me alone Bobby Please. Just stay out of it. Please.
Bobby: I want you to be happy. It’s just that I don’t trust this guy Ale. He shook his own blood all over me and laughed the whole time. Then he just jumped on me. The guy’s crazy Ale. And I won’t let you see him anymore. I’ll call the police it’s illegal for you to see him he’s over 21 and you’re not 18 yet.
Ale: I’m leaving and if I find out you called the cops I will never speak to you again do you understand me Bobby. Good. Don’t even bother talking to me. (Gets up to leave)
Bobby: Ale! Ale! Get the hell back here! Ale!
Ale: (walks down the hall, goes down the elevator, then exits the building, gets in her car infuriated)
Scene Change: Ale is on the phone trying to get a hold of Jack while stuck in traffic on her way back to the house.
Ale: (Dialing the phone) God where are you Jack!?
Ale: (phone ringing) Pick up the goshdamn phone. Pick it up. Damn-
Jack: (drunk answers the phone) Hullo? Ale?
Ale: Jack (answers immediately) Where are you? We need to talk.
Jack: I’m at Joe’s come on down sweetheart.
Ale: I’ll be there in a minute. (Then she runs a stoplight)
Scene change: Joe’s Bar Ale pulls up and gets out of the car, and starts in the bar.
Ale: (spotting Jack on his usual stool in the back. And walks over) Jack!
Jack: Hey baby! (Drunk)
Ale: Jack we really need to talk! Jack!
Jack: Talk away sweetheart.
Ale: Alone if you don’t mind honey. (Sarcastically while pulling Jack from the bar)
Jack: I’m coming. Just let me get my dri… (Drops his class) Oops just put it on my tab Joe. (Says this while laughing)
Jack: (after getting in the car) Hey Baby. (Starts kissing Ale)
Ale: (kisses back then pulls away) Jack I really do want to talk to you for just a sec ok? Ok.
Jack: (leans back) ok. What about?
Ale: Did you go see Bobby today? Because he says you did. And he says you threatened him? And now he doesn’t want me to see you.
Jack: Hold on. Ok yes I saw him (dumbfounded) At least I think I did. And no honey I didn’t threaten him. Alright now that that’s settled. (Leans in to kiss her again)
Ale: (kisses him back but then pulls back again) Ok I believe you but what about him not wanting me to see you. I mean I don’t like doing stuff against my brother Jack.
Jack: I don’t know why but your brother doesn’t like me, and he can’t control you, I can’t control you, only you can control you. I mean no one’s making you stay. You came on your own free will. Ok now lets try this again. (Kisses her again)
Ale: (Finally stops talking and kisses him back)
Scene change: Bobby at Joe's bar talking to Ace
Bobby: So what do you know about Jack Williams
Ace: What do you want to know?
Jack: Everything you know about him. (Firmly)
Ace: Well let's see he doesn't have any parents. Well take that back his dad's in jail. Uhh... he's been arrested three times in the last five years. He's almost always impossible to find and is really good at persuading people to do what he wants. I mean he's one hell of a spokes person.
Bobby: Anything else?
Ace: Yea he was married about two years ago.
Bobby: What? Where are they now?
Ace: They were murdered. 'Bout killed pour Jack. Especially seeing as how they never found there murderer.
Bobby: Oh my God (gets up to leave)
Scene Change: Night time on the town bridge fifty feet above the water. Drinking coffee
Jack: Hey I’ve never asked where you got your accent.
Ale: (staring out at the water) Well let’s see I lived in London until I was 14, and then my foster father moved me down here; and then when he was shot Esther took me in and that’s how Bobby became my brother
Ale: what about you have you always lived here? (Pauses and takes a pill)
Jack: For as long as I can remember I have, but then again I had some pretty brutal beatings so my head might not remember right. And what are those things you’re always taking?
Ale: Just daily vitamins. And I know how that goes I’ve had it pretty rough before I got to Esther. Constant beating I think that’s why I love violence because it’s all I’ve ever known
Jack: Same here (knowingly still looking at the cup where she just took her pills) Parents suck did you ever know your real ones?
Ale: yea for a little while anyways I had a picture perfect family. You see my mom left when I was four. Then my dad left when I was 6 leaving me with his prostitute wife. And she passed me around on all of her clients until she got shot by one of them. Then all of my foster parents did the same you know hit me and all that shit. Then I came here my foster father was shot that’s when Esther took me in she was the only woman who ever bothered to care. Then she got killed a year ago at a convient store hold up so Bobby's my guardian now. How about you?
Jack: mine was just as good. My mom was killed by my dad when I was five but the court never convicted him. So I was stuck with him. And he would come home drunk and knock me around till my white carpet was dyed red with my blood. He even put me on top of the stove once when it was on. Constantly telling me I had to go to college because he didn’t. He'd come home drunk with all his girlfriends and beat me up while they laughed. I was a punching bag for him and all his friends and I would go a month at times without food or a bath or any of that kind of stuff. We constantly switched apartments because he couldn’t pay the rent everyone worse than the one before. So yea I had a picture perfect family to.
Ale: Man we was beat when we was born. So I wonder why we love fights and violence so much after everything we've been through
Jack: (taking a swallow of his beer) now that I don't know all I can guess is that’s when our parents tried to kill us over and over. We decided that instead of realizing that it hurt we made it feel good we turned into pleasure until the point where we craved and it became our ultimate high. I mean because violence is the ultimate high.
Ale: So basically we're psychotic yea I think that pretty much sums it up.
Jack: We're not psychotic we just know that someday we're gonna die and instead of being afraid of that fact we take every chance that we can get to make our lives that much better. In the words of Tyler Durden from Fight Club, “It’s only after we’ve lost everything, that we’re free to do anything.” I mean we could try and go through life and say we're going to be famous. We'll be known world wide, people will want to be us, but it will never happen and it’s about damn time we realize that we're society's unwanted children and we're fine with that. We realize that we were dealt the bad hand since the day the doctor smacked us on our asses when we entered this world. That’s why we live everyday making it as pleasant as possible. But not anymore because we're going to do what we want and push everyone out of our way we're going to be free from all that consumerism and high society. We're going to take the fact that we're society's unwanted children and use it to our advantage.
Ale: (staring at Jack with awe) I knew there was a reason I stayed.
Jack: The only question now is what are we going to do with this new found realization?
Ale: I don't think it matters it’s our world now right. I mean the world as we knew it is now our domain.
Jack: That’s exactly right. And now we just need to let the world know that we’re not following the rules anymore. I mean let’s face it every rule out there has been made by some rich guy who thinks he’s perfect I say we need to stop trying to be so damn perfect and let things happen as they happen. We need to learn to let go. So what do you say let’s let go.
Ale: What? (Says this as Jack lifts her on top of the railing of the bridge.
Jack: (holds her, and looks down.) Are you ready?
Ale: (Looking down) No but let’s do it. (And they let go and fall fifty feet into the water screaming)
Ale: That is the most amazing thing I have ever done.
Jack: That was so awesome. (They both look up at the bridge and sees people looking down and pointing)
Jack: I think we’ve just started a whole new revolution. (Looks at Ale and they both start laughing)
Scene Change: Bobby is on his way home after leaving the hospital. He is on the phone with his friend Josh who knows everyone and where to find them in town.
Bobby: (Josh picks up the phone) Josh Hey I need you to do me a favor man
Josh: What do you need me to do?
Bobby: Do you know a guy by the name Jack Williams?
Josh: Yea man. That guy is crazy man. He owns that place where you can go…
Bobby: Yea yea I know fight for the fun of it., so you know him then
Josh: Of course I know him. What do you want from him?
Bobby: Where can I find him?
Josh: I don’t know if I should tell you he made it pretty clear he doesn’t like to be found. Unless you got good reason. (Probing him for answers)
Bobby: He’s got my little sister. Now where can I find him?
Josh: So that was Ale…
Bobby: Wait what do you mean that was Ale?
Josh: Well Big Todd told me he saw Jack and Ale jump off of the old bridge. Apparently they wanted to experience the rush. I never knew your sister was such a dare-devil.
Bobby: She wasn’t that Jack has got her thinking all these things that just doesn’t make any sense; stuff like the world looks done on us and we were dealt a bad card in life, and we’re low-lives.
Josh: Damn man I didn’t realize that. Sure I’ll tell you we’re he’s at man.
Bobby: Thanks man
Josh: Alright man he’s at his house right now just go to 1966 Ashland Stokes Bridge Rd. He’s there with Robbie and your little sister.
Bobby: Thanks man I owe you one.
Josh: No problem man and tell your sister I said hey.
Bobby: Alright man. Check you later.
Scene change: Jack’s house. Mid-day, with Jack, Robbie, and Ale, while eating.
Peter: Hey guys check it out (starts reading from newspaper) “Two people were seen jumping off the old Jameson Bridge last night at around 1:00 a.m. in the morning. They were seen talking on the side when they got up on the railing and jumped down fifty feet below. Although no one talked to them afterwards they were seen bobbing back up in the water and laughing. What has our youth come to that would make them want to jump off of bridges? What dare I ask is next?” Wow I wonder who it was. (Pondering the thought)
Ale: (looks at Jack and they smile) I don’t know probably just a couple of punks drunk.
Peter: (Looks from Ale to Jack) wait you mean it was you two. How come I wasn’t in on it? (Accusingly)
Jack: it was a spur of the moment thing.
Peter: Yeah right
Ale: No it was really
Jack: Seriously man am I the kind of guy who plans anything out?
Peter: I wouldn’t say that
Jack: Well listen to this I was thinking that (stops as car drives up)

Peter: Where you expecting somebody?
Jack: No
Ale: Oh my God
Jack: What?
Ale: That’s Bobby’s car
Jack: (walking out on the porch) Can I help you with something there Bobby?
Bobby: Cut the crap. Where’s Ale?!?
Jack: You know I don’t know but…
Bobby: Ale!!! Get you ass out here right now!!!
Jack: Now hold on right there she’ll come out f she wants to but if she doesn’t want to talk to you than your not gonna to make her. (Gets up in Bobby’s face)
Bobby: I’m leaving here with my sister whether you like it or not. (Gets right back up in Jack’s face)
Ale: (they both turn when Ale walks outside) What do you want Bobby?
Bobby: I want you to come home right now. (Firmly)
Ale: Well that’s not going to happen. I like it right where I am. (Goes and stands beside Jack)
Jack: Well if that’s all you wanted I guess you’ll be on your way. (Puts his arm around Ale)
Bobby: I’ll leave as soon as my sister gets her ass in the car. (Looks at Ale) Ale get in the damn car. We’re leaving.
Bobby: You know what fine. I'll go but, can I please just have one second with you please Ale?
Jack: Listen she said she didn't want to talk so why...
Ale: It's ok Jack.
Bobby: Thank you. (Looks at Jack) Alone if you don't mind.
Jack: Now ho...
Ale: Jack just give us a minute ok? (Looks at Jack pleadingly)
Jack: Alright I'll be right inside if you need anything ok?
Ale: Alright. (Looks back at Bobby) Ok what do you have to say?
Bobby: I'm sorry if you think that it's you that I don't trust because it's not. Ok?
Ale: I know that.
Bobby: It's him I don't like.
Ale: What don’t you like about him Bobby? I mean do you even have one good reason for me to go with you other than the fact that you don’t like him.
Bobby: Where to freaking start? He’s been in jail three times in the last freaking five years Ale! He has a talent of getting people to do what he wants; and he was married two years ago but then they were just murdered while he was off in England. He’s not good for you, or your health. (Last 3 parts muttered)
Ale: You have no right to talk about my health, and beside I’m taking care of that. And just so you know I know he’s been arrested before and in case you forgot you’ve been to jail a couple time to. And where in hellfire did you here that he was married.
Bobby: Ace told me it happened two years ago His wife’s name was Rebecca and he had a little girl to. Her name was Jasmine.
Ale: Stop it! I finally have something good in my life please don't ruin it for me. (In tears)
Bobby: Do you honestly think this is going to last Ale? Wake up! Nothing good ever lasts especially not for people like us. (Tries to go to Ale)
Ale: (pushes him away) Stay away from me! Get the hell out of here. (Bobby tries to go to her again) Don't touch me. I said get out.
Bobby: 9pauses then turns to leave) I love you Ale. You’re my sister and I love you. I just want you to that.
Ale: (on her knees sobbing) please get out. (Says between breaths)
Bobby: (gets in car and leaves)
Ale: (turns around and sees Jack waiting in the house and mouths to him...) Goodbye (and turns and runs)
Jack: (bolts out of the door and screams) Ale! Ale don't do this! Ale! (Runs after her as she runs onto a crowded sidewalk)
Scene change: Jack running after Ale on the sidewalk
Jack: (running into people shouting Ale's name while people curse at him as he runs into them) Ale!!! (Over and over)
Bystander: (gets in front of Jack Hey man do you have some money?
Jack: Move I have to get by (trying to push his way through)
Bystander: come on man just a couple of dollars.
Jack: (reaches in his pocket and throws $50 at the man) there! (Continues to scream for Ale) Ale!! (Looks around and realizes he’s lost her to the crowd)
Scene change: Ale enters a Bed and Breakfast and starts talking to the owner
Mrs. Miller/owner: Well hello there can I help you with something? (Says this as Ale enters in back first cheerily)
Ale: (turns around) Yes I’d like to rent a room for a couple of nights please
Mrs. Miller: Are you alright honey? You're not in any trouble are you?
Ale: No mam so how much are the rooms?
Mrs. Miller: $30 a night
Ale: Alright I’ll be here probably three nights (hands her the money)
Mrs. Miller: Well alright then let’s get you settled in (looks around for Ale's bags)
Well child where are your bags?
Ale: I don't have any
Mrs. Miller: Well I say I ain't never had someone come in with no bags, but alright how about some food then?
Ale: (looks out the window one more time) Alright.
Scene change: Jack walks back into the house.
Peter: What happened? Why was Ale at the Miller’s Bed and Breakfast?
Jack: What? (Demanding)
Peter: I saw Ale go in that bed and breakfast place you know right near the park.
Jack: (runs out of the house. Goes to get in his car)
Peter: Hey where are you going? (Screams)
Jack: (doesn’t even look back as he drives off)
Scene Change: Back at the bed and breakfast Ale is eating dinner with Mrs. Miller
Mrs. Miller: Are you sure you’re alright sweetie? (Says this as she gives Ale her dinner and sits down at the other end of the table)
Ale: Yes thank you. (Says as she eats a bite of macaroni and cheese)
Mrs. Miller: Ok. So what brings you here to my little inn? Do you live far away?
Ale: Umm it’s just our house is kind of full right now. So I was just going to crash somewhere else for a few days. That’s all.
Mrs. Miller: So you live here?
Ale: Yes mam (still looking over her shoulder)
Mrs. Miller: I swear if I had a dollar for every time you looked out that window.
Ale: I’m sorry (smiles apologetically)
Mrs. Miller: It’s alright. So how is the roast beef?
Ale: It’s gre- (someone comes in the door)
Mrs. Miller: Excuse me dear.
Ale: Sure (trying to see who it is) cool it (mutters to herself then hears Mrs. Miller say across the room)
Mrs. Miller: How can I help you (says to the man at the door)
Man: Yeah umm I’m actually looking for somebody. Is there a umm Ale Mone here?
Ale: Oh My God! (And falls out of chair) shit. (Gets up to go out the back)
Jack/man: Ale (sees Ale in the back and pushes Mrs. Miller and starts running after her)
Ale: (runs out the back door)
Jack: Ale! (Runs after her and screams)
Ale: (keeps running)
Jack: (mutters to himself) darn she’s fast (then screams yet again) Ale! Come on. Give me a chance to explain! Ale! (Speeds up) Ale! (Catches up to her and grabs her making them both fall to the ground)
Ale: (they both get up and she turns and starts hitting him) Why didn’t you tell me? I trusted you! My whole life has been filled with nothing but people lying to me! (Stops and falls on the ground and sobs)
Jack: (kneels down beside Ale) Hey its ok. I love you Ale when will you understand that?
Ale: (After long pause) I do I mean I do understand. (Another long pause then whispers) I love you to.
Jack: (leans in and kisses Ale then hugs her. Then starts laughing. Looks up at Ale still laughing)
Ale: (laughs to they both start laughing right in the rain)
Scene change: Ale and Jack are in the car on the way home the car is silent
Ale: You didn’t have to hide it from me you know it wouldn’t have changed anything you know. But why were you arrested the last time? I know all the other times but you never told me about what happened that last time.
Jack: (thinks for a second) When my family was killed, it nearly killed me, and I didn’t tell you because I was afraid of what you might think; and it was just so much easier that way.
Ale: I know how you feel on that one I tried to kill myself when my mom Esther was killed.
Jack: Well hold on a sec that’s not all. When the detective told me at his office that they were closing the case without convicting anybody I blew up. I threw things around like chairs and papers and shoved the desk. Then this other cop came in and tried to restrain me, and that’s when I got my first taste of violence, because you see I had never been in a fight since my father and all of a sudden right then and there I blew it. I tried to kill him all that anger that I had been holding in I let it all out right on him. It took five guys to hold me back. The guy was in a coma for 10 months. So I served two years. And the bad thing was I never got to tell the man I was sorry. Not once. I felt bad about hurting him because it made me realize how much I was like my father, and that terrified me. That’s why I never fight somebody unless they agree.
Ale: Have you ever tried to find that cop I mean so you could tell him how you felt?
Jack: Yes, I even went to his house once. His name was Kevin James I saw him there in a wheelchair with his wife and child. I just couldn’t bring myself to do it.
Ale: Would you ever try and talk to him if you had the chance to you know if he was alone?
Jack: Don’t even think about Ale. I’m not even supposed to see him. My probation officer won’t let me.
Ale: You’re on probation do you realize that half the stuff you do could put you back in prison. Gosh, Jack you are so infuriating!!!
Jack: (laughing) Will you just relax. I’m smarter than you take me for.
Ale: (mutters) humph. Let’s see how you feel when you’re back in jail.
Jack: I’m sorry what was that? (Still laughing)
Ale: (as Jack tarts car again) We really do have to start telling the truth more often so that we can avoid moments like this. Because I don’t know about you but I don’t want this to happen again.
Jack: Amen to that. (Looks at Ale) So what are we going to do about your brother?
Ale: Life just refuses to be easy.
Jack: Not meaning to reference Fight Club, but in the words of Tyler Durden, “Without pain, without sacrifice, we would have nothing.”
Ale: You know one of these days you’re going to have to stop referring to Tyler Durden no matter how smart his remarks are.
Jack: How dare you put down Fight Club that has got to be the best movie that man ever created, best book to. There hasn’t been one decent movie since either.
Ale: What am I going to do with you? (Kisses Jack while he’s driving then pulls back)
Jack: Now back to the subject of your brother.
Ale: Can we not talk about him till we get home please?
Jack: (then pulls into the house driveway) Oh look here we are (sarcastically)
Ale: Shut up. (Then stops as Robbie comes out looking very distressed)
Peter: Where have you two been?
Jack: Are you ok man?
Peter: (Looks at Ale) Ale I don’t know how to say this? (Stares at him)
Peter: It’s your brother
Ale: What about my brother?
Peter: Well the police came by and asked for you and I said you weren’t here, Then I asked what they wanted with you and then they asked if I was family. I lied and said yes. Then they told me that, he was killed in a car accident. He was driving out near the interstate and apparently he wasn’t paying attention and went on the wrong side of the road, and well there was an 18 wheeler, well you know how it goes from there. (pauses) I’m so sorry Ale
Ale: (Standing still the whole time looked up with a glaze in her eyes then looks at Jack)
Scene Change: Bobby’s grave right after funeral. Jack, Ale, and Peter.
Jack: wow this place is really creepy. (Trying to lighten the mood)
Ale: It’s a cemetery. What do you expect?
Jack: creepiness (sullenly)
Peter: Wow I’m really bored (Jack smacks Peter across the head)
Jack: Damn it Peter you are so stupid.
Ale: (starts laughing)
Jack: (starts laughing to)
Peter: What I missed it? What is so funny? (Then starts laughing to)
Ale: (looks up and says…) You know what Peter I’m bored to. Let’s go do something.
Jack: What’d you have in mind?
Ale: I’m sure we can think of something to piss the world off.
Jack: Let’s go.
To be continued…..
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